First things first CW: violence, suicide, sexism, racism but all done satirically if that changes things
This is an etherpad (It's like google docs but without the evil corporate data mining) link to it: https://rich.etherpad.com/p/r.11e54ca11de75dd143910cae7a71a4ba
The premise for the story is a game show as absurdist allegories for capitalism in general, and USA in particular. Long term I'm hoping to animate the text into like a super stylized subtitle to really emphasize the game show-y-ness and be able to control tone and timing to help humor come through in text. But that'll be a lot of additional work so I'm trying to get the text locked down (or depending on feedback locked away) before that.
So, any feedback is appreciated, particularly at this point just pass/fail "Do you think this project is worth continuing with?"
Thanks and I hope you have as much fun reading as I did writing!
So since I got the 'point' early on I didn't finish it. I suspect the point at the end is similar to the 'point' at the beginning. Focus on creating an upending of expectations in your drafts after condensing everything. Pay attention to how Saunders upends expectations and try something like that, if you're lost.
After a few rounds of edits (keep me in the loop please), you should absolutely submit this to journals. I never would have submitted anything to anywhere if a published critique partner hadn't pushed me into it, so I'm doing that for you. If nothing else, check out the grinder.diabolicalplots.com and start to build a spreadsheet of magazines, with genres, styles, and submission periods. You can get a future draft of this published if you want to.