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Read Chapter 1 - J'kelri from the story Drain Space by Myelint with 0 reads. space, disabled, humor. "The universe moves in strange and mysterious ways." I...

Hello! I wrote a book and I wanted to share the first chapter and get feedback. I have considered trying the whole nine and trying to get published, but I have a visual disability so editing is very hard for me, and honestly I don't think it's what any publisher is looking for anyway. If I get a good response I'll post more.

  • plinky [he/him]
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    7 months ago

    meow-floppy interesting meow-fiesta

    I think, at the start (like first 2-3 paragraphs) there is a little bit too many adjectives/maybe too flowery. And is color theme important overall? we get lots of descriptions of colors, but not textures/smells/sounds?

    • CapnCat [any]
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      7 months ago

      Thank you for your feedback! I see what you mean, I hadn't really considered the other senses for this chapter, it gets a little better later.