Hello! I wrote a book and I wanted to share the first chapter and get feedback. I have considered trying the whole nine and trying to get published, but I have a visual disability so editing is very hard for me, and honestly I don't think it's what any publisher is looking for anyway. If I get a good response I'll post more.
Thank you for your feedback! I see what you mean, I hadn't really considered the other senses for this chapter, it gets a little better later.