CapnCat [any]

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  • Yeah, Cat's bag is still on the J'kelri space ship. I guess The bag's out of the cat (that was a reach, I'm sorry)

    Yeah, sunset doesn't make sense, I think I'll change that.

    Cat is very hungry, but cat is used to missing meals at the monastery, and the days excitement kind of overrode that feeling.

    Thank you for your feedback.


  • CapnCat [any]
    hexagon
    towritingCan I get feedback on the second chapter of my story
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    8 months ago

    I'm glad to hear that you like it! This is strongly inspired by Star Wars, so I'm glad it's got good vibes and not ripoff vibes lol.

    You do a lot to lay out social conventions and economic realities, maybe a bit too detailed and getting sidetracked with it sometimes, but it's a hard line to toe and you do a good job.

    Yeah, honestly this is after a bunch of editing too. I'm glad to hear that I did a good job though. I was trying to do a lot of world building because I was thinking of making it a starfinder campaign before I settled on a novel. I have a "supplemental materials" story on wattpad that's unpublished with all the details I've taken out lol.

    I like Cat but I wonder why she has internalized this belief system so thoroughly in just a few years, and wonder at the people who volunteer to help her, and think she might be being taken for a ride. I don't know how illegal the stuff her smuggler friend wants her to move is, but the thing is, neither does Cat.

    So I feel there's mystery here and Cat's naivete being purposeful and showing room to grow. I feel like diving into her new religion is her way of coping with the nightmare she found herself thrust into, far away from everyone and knowing nothing about anything, then awakening to a kind community who heard her say "I need to find my way in the universe (literally)" and they were like "it's funny you should say that." Pretty big coincidence.

    no spoilers, but your head is in the right place

    Thank you again for your feedback



  • CapnCat [any]
    hexagon
    towritingCan I get feedback on the second chapter of my story
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    edit-2
    8 months ago

    suspiciously helpful sidekicks and mysterious room which is closed

    Yep, no spoilers though

    btw, did cat get her stuff from the original ship, timing is very confusing

    Like the one that Cat got to J'kelri on? There wasn't much on it, but I elaborate on it in the next chapter

    Can you elaborate on timing?

    Thank you for your feedback!




  • CapnCat [any]tomemesworldbuilding
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    8 months ago

    Actually, mine is hard sci-fi but themes of social change are common there as well. but my book specifically has a female bug protagonist who joins a multi species crew and falls for the human.
















  • I am going to have to disagree. I didn't find most of the jokes in the first episode that funny, second was better though.

    Mostly I felt like the episodes were rushed and given a poor budget. There are scene changes with no expositional shot, plot lines are lackluster, scenes often don't have any background characters, shots feel static and not dynamic, and Leela hasn't kicked anybody yet. Pretty disappointed so far.