Feedback wise, the images of ‘life’ feel hackneyed in comparison to the creative symbolism of depression.
The fifth line uses ‘it’ as depression’s pronouns instead of ‘he’. (Unless you were trying to say that the situation without depression will be more lonely than anything else, but that doesn’t quite fit thematically.)
Good shit. Solid theme and execution.
Feedback wise, the images of ‘life’ feel hackneyed in comparison to the creative symbolism of depression.
The fifth line uses ‘it’ as depression’s pronouns instead of ‘he’. (Unless you were trying to say that the situation without depression will be more lonely than anything else, but that doesn’t quite fit thematically.)