Solace in consistency & safety in the alone

  • ass [he/him,comrade/them]
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    3 years ago

    Then, all at once, the crushing tidal wave of life shoves you to the surface

    The sky is blue, not gray, today

    A child at the park

    A little yellow flower

    This packed a wallop

  • dung_Eater [none/use name]
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    edit-2
    3 years ago

    i ain't reading all that

    i'm happy for you tho

    or sorry that happened

    edit: this is cute tho

  • KiaKaha [he/him]
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    3 years ago

    Good shit. Solid theme and execution.

    Feedback wise, the images of ‘life’ feel hackneyed in comparison to the creative symbolism of depression.

    The fifth line uses ‘it’ as depression’s pronouns instead of ‘he’. (Unless you were trying to say that the situation without depression will be more lonely than anything else, but that doesn’t quite fit thematically.)