Hello! I wrote a book and I wanted to share the first chapter and get feedback. I have considered trying the whole nine and trying to get published, but I have a visual disability so editing is very hard for me, and honestly I don't think it's what any publisher is looking for anyway. If I get a good response I'll post more.
It's a bit rough around the edges, but I could see it being a pretty good read with a bit of polish.
Couple of typos that stood out.
Gotta remove one of the 'could not's here.
Thank you for your feedback, I really appreciate it! I agree this chapter needs some work, I just sort of threw a bunch of exposition in it. I'd get rid of it completely, but it introduces some characters that are important later.
Welcome! Good luck with it!