When I posted my first chapter, I got some good feedback and a lot to think about so I wanted to edit it and get some feedback on the second chapter, since it has a different tone. Here is a link to the edited first chapter. Thank you in advance.
edit: Thanks again for the feedback, I promise I won't post again until the story is done
I meant you specifically mention "i had left my bag on the shuttle", but then they lift off
, i wouldnt have thought about it otherwise . Also if i understood correctly, they lift off during sunset, shouldn't the planet be dark? And cat should be very hungry 
Yeah, Cat's bag is still on the J'kelri space ship. I guess The bag's out of the cat (that was a reach, I'm sorry)
Yeah, sunset doesn't make sense, I think I'll change that.
Cat is very hungry, but cat is used to missing meals at the monastery, and the days excitement kind of overrode that feeling.
Thank you for your feedback.