Posadas [he/him, they/them] to chapotraphouse • 3 years agoPig on pig violence, you hate to see itimagemessage-square26 fedilinkarrow-up171
arrow-up171imagePig on pig violence, you hate to see itPosadas [he/him, they/them] to chapotraphouse • 3 years agomessage-square26 Commentsfedilink
minus-squareeylligator2 [she/her,none/use name]hexbear14·3 years ago"His hand discharges" assumes a connection between the man, his hand and domestic violence. We need some more obfuscation. Have you tried "[...] where a hand appeared near an individual's face"? link
minus-squarehalf_giraffe [comrade/them]hexbear11·3 years agoDefinitely an improvement, I am not a local reporter so my passive voice muscles aren't that trained link
"His hand discharges" assumes a connection between the man, his hand and domestic violence. We need some more obfuscation. Have you tried "[...] where a hand appeared near an individual's face"?
Definitely an improvement, I am not a local reporter so my passive voice muscles aren't that trained