I have an essay due for my HS senior English final. Don't have any friends so its available here [Imperialism, Vietnam, and Sacred Soldiers] if I could get some feedback. I changed the name of myself and the teacher for privacy; the prompt is "How do varying perspectives, points of view, and narrative techniques define the diverse experiences of a conflict?", "the conflict" being the Vietnam War. The "two sources out of ten" comment is referencing a project for this essay where we had to write notes on ten assigned sources for the final. Most sources are from my own research/reading. Unfortunately it does have to be 12 pt and double spaced even though that gives you like five words a page.

Edit: don't mind the "we are challenged with" bit at the beginning, it's been removed in the actual document

  • Asia_Set [he/him]
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    1 year ago

    I think it's great that you posted this. I annotated it with some comments

    Password to access the annotated version is

    xzhz4S+H5e5D9y6d

    Others feel free to chime in if you have feedback on my feedback!

    Edit: The file will automatically delete after 7 days by the way, on Jun 7, 2023, 2:31 AM UTC

    • dinklesplein [any, he/him]
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      1 year ago

      a 🤓 nitpick is that 'subaltern' is the generally preferred term within continental theory, at least form what i've read. i've only really heard 'global south' within explicitly marxist spaces. periphery is fine too.

      • Asia_Set [he/him]
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        1 year ago

        Nah that's fair. I honestly appreciate the correction. Does "continental theory" imply that World Systems Theory falls under the academic umbrella of continental philosophy?

        Edit: also do you think my objection to using "third world" lies on overly technical grounds, like is that distinction not strictly relevant?

        • dinklesplein [any, he/him]
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          1 year ago

          World Systems specifically isn't directly linked to it but they're more or less adjacent from my understanding. Keep in mind I only did philosophy as an undergrad so I could be misremembering shit. For a university essay I would probably nitpick the Third World part too but it doesn't matter for a high school one.

          • Asia_Set [he/him]
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            1 year ago

            I appreciate the info. Yeah that makes sense with high school vs college