I had to give up halfway through this because of how painfully bad the writing is. The most shocking part of the text is that whoever wrote this claims to have an English degree.
I feel like the trainwreck of the opening sentence just captures the vibe
In the summer, in the south of France, my husband and I like to play, rather badly, the lottery.
Beyond how God awful the structure and pacing are, what is this content? It takes her like a hundred words and almost as many commas to say 'I won the lottery when I met my partner'.
The one quoted in the comment @disposable_cracker@hexbear.net found is even better. I didn't make it that far, this shit's unparseable for me.
I dream of new structures, a world in which women have entry-level jobs in their 30s; alternate avenues for promotion; corporate ladders with balconies on which they can stand still, have a smoke, take a break, make a baby, enjoy themselves, before they keep climbing.
That is entirely too fucking many semi-colons that still props up the mother of all run-ons! Like, I know I'm guilty of semi-colon abuse sometimes; but this is beyond the fucking pale
She's using the corporate ladder metaphor to say that she wants to party and make babies without harming her career. It's confusing how she says she wants a ladder with a balcony but eh
Oh I get what she's getting at, worth also noting that it's so myopic it starts with a clear personal grievance. I don't think "entry-level jobs in their 30s" is even a top-50 goal for feminists wrt gender equity in the work place. The balcony thing is hamfisted too.
The problem is she wants this stilted style, a bunch of commas; maybe a semi-colon to make sure a list is split up in a way that lets you easily discern items. When if you really wanted to lean into the ladder vibe and write in a weird way it's clearly a spot for line breaks:
I dream of new structures:
a world in which women have entry-level jobs in their 30s;
alternate avenues for promotion;
corporate ladders with balconies on which they can stand still, have a smoke, take a break, make a baby, enjoy themselves,
before they keep climbing.
Yeah she could use an editor. But I've also known people who talk exactly like that so is it really bad writing if it perfectly captures the mind of the author, clunkiness and all?
lol that's an interesting lens. in this case yes because idgaf about the author's banal bourgeois rationalization of their conservatism, and the fact they captured it more authentically just heightens that disgust
I had to give up halfway through this because of how painfully bad the writing is. The most shocking part of the text is that whoever wrote this claims to have an English degree.
I feel like the trainwreck of the opening sentence just captures the vibe
Beyond how God awful the structure and pacing are, what is this content? It takes her like a hundred words and almost as many commas to say 'I won the lottery when I met my partner'.
what the fuck is that sentence?? this is beats the worst i have writen. its so bad, i could hardly beat that if i tried...
The one quoted in the comment @disposable_cracker@hexbear.net found is even better. I didn't make it that far, this shit's unparseable for me.
I dream of whole new sentences but here we are.
That is entirely too fucking many semi-colons that still props up the mother of all run-ons! Like, I know I'm guilty of semi-colon abuse sometimes; but this is beyond the fucking pale
this is so bad that it gives me motivation to actually write. Like i am so much better at writing then this person.
She's using the corporate ladder metaphor to say that she wants to party and make babies without harming her career. It's confusing how she says she wants a ladder with a balcony but eh
Oh I get what she's getting at, worth also noting that it's so myopic it starts with a clear personal grievance. I don't think "entry-level jobs in their 30s" is even a top-50 goal for feminists wrt gender equity in the work place. The balcony thing is hamfisted too.
The problem is she wants this stilted style, a bunch of commas; maybe a semi-colon to make sure a list is split up in a way that lets you easily discern items. When if you really wanted to lean into the ladder vibe and write in a weird way it's clearly a spot for line breaks:
Yeah she could use an editor. But I've also known people who talk exactly like that so is it really bad writing if it perfectly captures the mind of the author, clunkiness and all?
lol that's an interesting lens. in this case yes because idgaf about the author's banal bourgeois rationalization of their conservatism, and the fact they captured it more authentically just heightens that disgust
Good writing - is when punctuation; the more punctuation, the gooder writing it is.
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lmao those people have shit taste
Are they 13 years old or something? It's written worse than verbose reddit comments, and that's saying something
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Begging these people to read an actual book by a good author. Even books written for kids and teenagers are 100x better than this article.
You made it halfway congrats. I got like 6 sentences
https://www.graziechristie.com/
they've got a whole series of pointless, misogynistic articles, and are even the editor of a magazine (I presume the started it)
grazie, you're a piece of shit