it's built on like 20 layers of in-jokes and is completely inscrutable to anyone who hasn't spent their entire lives in the deepest corners of internet culture
... that's how all culture works. You're not going to get most of the in-jokes and cultural references of some other country's culture immediately because you didn't grow up in it. Doesn't mean it's bad.
but this isn't trying to talk to someone in another culture, this is a literary work. The writing is clunky due to the excessive memespeak and every sentence mostly just serves as an amassing of a bunch of obscure internet references, most of which do nearly nothing for the story and in many cases actually obscure the meaning of what she's trying to say. There's an idea here but it's not pulled off well.
... that's how all culture works. You're not going to get most of the in-jokes and cultural references of some other country's culture immediately because you didn't grow up in it. Doesn't mean it's bad.
I keep telling people the bible is hilarious but all the dick jokes don't translate out of Aramaic!
but this isn't trying to talk to someone in another culture, this is a literary work. The writing is clunky due to the excessive memespeak and every sentence mostly just serves as an amassing of a bunch of obscure internet references, most of which do nearly nothing for the story and in many cases actually obscure the meaning of what she's trying to say. There's an idea here but it's not pulled off well.